Instead of sounding deep you sound very out of breath. We can hear too much of your own voice bleeding through and it takes a viewer out of it. Try transitioning this impression from your throat and start speaking from your diaphragm. You'll get cleaner results over time.
ill give that a try , thanks for the advice.
You can certainly hold the pitch, but your mic suffers from a lot of peaking.
I'd otherwise give your performance a four.
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